Answers to questions posed by the professor
- Yes, I have done similar type of writing in the past, in the form of telling a story about my past too. Just going back to memory lane and telling those same memories as a story rather than how they are. Like I did with this essay. The only difference is that it wasn’t as long as this essay.
- My narrative tells a story, my story. Like my childhood it speaks about how I grew up the challenges that accompanied my family at the time. Which is also how I chose my significant moment. Did it pose a significant challenge/accomplishment in my life then yea I used it as a significant moment
- As a learner it reveals that I’m good at catching a reader’s attention. But that I fall short as time goes on and that I should do better with my pacing as well as my grammar. Although I do have strengths, I also do have cons in my writing.
- They found the story interesting but also found that I was rushing and that it seems like I lost track during the third page and that the pacing was too fast. It’s not what I wanted but I kind of expected that. As I lost track myself once I hit page three.
- Being more descriptive and showing not telling the story outright. I wanted the reader to imagine what I felt and what was happening. I think describing it more figuratively instead of outright just telling the story but being my descriptive with the atmosphere, surroundings can better portray that
- Yes, I think being more descriptive and expanding on certain things like atmosphere, surroundings and the events transpiring are some improvements I should and need to make. Implanting those changes can help better achieve my goal of having my writing be more visual then just telling. Help the reader imagine more than just shove the words in their head
